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Lichelle Slater - Status: Member
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Chapter 3-P2-Vasha--3rd P Lanya started to hum as she dusted the wizard’s study. It wasn’t new to her to be happy, but it was a new experience for her to be able to speak with someone that appeared to appreciate her help.Chapter 3-P2-Vasha--3rd P
“I wager the slave is doing well?”
Lanya jumped and spun, but smiled when she saw Weshter. “Yes, Master. And he was grateful to be getting a bath as well.”
in Fantasy 8h 20m ago
Chapter 3-Vasha--3rd Person Chapter 3Chapter 3-Vasha--3rd Person
Trayden heaved another log onto the house, setting it in place. Emery, a blue-haired, blue eyed friend, rubbed the plaster into place.
“It’s coming along nicely,” she stated.
Trayden grunted.
Emery frowned and looked up at him. The black bear was nearly two heads taller th
in Fantasy 8h 22m ago
Chapter 2-Vasha--3rd Person Chapter 2Chapter 2-Vasha--3rd Person
Lanya curtseyed politely as she stopped in front of the wizard’s desk. Weshter smiled as he stood up. “You seem worried,” he observed.
“Well…the king…I mean, King Baqoure has put me in charge of a prisoner,” her soft voice explained. For some reason, Weshter was the only one that she was able to make eye-contact with, other than the rest of the slaves. In fact, he preferred she look at him when s
in Fantasy 1d 1m ago
Chapter1-Vasha--3rd Person Chapter 1Chapter1-Vasha--3rd Person
“Tighter, girl!” The guard smashed his gauntleted hand against the back of the young woman’s head.
She winced, suppressing a cry, as she glanced up at him. Though the rain had stopped hours earlier, a thick mist was left hanging in the leaves of the Burntwood Forest. The ground was still damp, the leaves lazily dripping with the remaining moisture.
in Fantasy 1d 2h ago
This is all of the new version that I am going to post. I only need to know what you all think of the third person point of view. So let me know.
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Hell, I don't care how you choose to write it-
a) it's your story, do what your heart/story tells you and
b) it's going to be grrrr (actually didn't mean to do that but fought (jesus with the typos!) I'd leave it there anyways.) grrreat.
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"What the Hell's a Babbitman?"
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Third person in general tends to isolate the reader from the character- where as it's easier to empathise with a character when it's in first person.
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It's always darkest before dawn.
"What the Hell's a Babbitman?"
"It's Batman crossed by a hobbit."
I'll see. I just hope I can get my sis to read it and see which she likes better. (MAJOR reader) And I'll get the opinion of my readers.
As for parts in first or third...wouldn't that get confusing?
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Why don't you do some parts in third person, and some in first person? It can do wonders from a narrative point of view- you can then have to completely seperate situations unfold for the readr, and keep the characters oblivious to some of them- which sets up the reader for either some great "in" jokes or can be a powerful tool in building suspense.
My dear, I don't think we'd say it if we didn't mean it.
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It's always darkest before dawn.
"What the Hell's a Babbitman?"
"It's Batman crossed by a hobbit."
As for the link...thank you!
And I'm really not as great as you all make me out to be. However, I am going to re-write Vasha in 3rd person and see which way is better. I know I can get more description and information in if it's in 3rd person, so we'll see how I like it before I post it.
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Ahem.
Thanks for the watch. (Sorry, just read the journal and found that you've finished Vasha....
Btw, I know I really shouldn't, coz, TECHNICALLY you're kinda competetion (*pfft* Yeah, ok. I'm about as much competetion to you as a writer as the pope is a to Mohammed Ali as a boxer) but you've got a note incoming. Lookit!
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It's always darkest before dawn.
"What the Hell's a Babbitman?"
"It's Batman crossed by a hobbit."
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It's better to keep you mouth shut and APPEAR stupid, than it is to open it and remove all doubt. - Mark Twain
Get feedback on all of your work! Join Project Reciprocation! [link]
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Life is a poem,
It ebbs and flows.
Don't care if it pleases others,
And recall that it doesn't always rhyme.
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It's better to keep you mouth shut and APPEAR stupid, than it is to open it and remove all doubt. - Mark Twain
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Life is a poem,
It ebbs and flows.
Don't care if it pleases others,
And recall that it doesn't always rhyme.
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It's better to keep you mouth shut and APPEAR stupid, than it is to open it and remove all doubt. - Mark Twain
Get feedback on all of your work! Join Project Reciprocation! [link]
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Life is a poem,
It ebbs and flows.
Don't care if it pleases others,
And recall that it doesn't always rhyme.
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Life is a poem,
It ebbs and flows.
Don't care if it pleases others,
And recall that it doesn't always rhyme.
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It's better to keep you mouth shut and APPEAR stupid, than it is to open it and remove all doubt. - Mark Twain
Get feedback on all of your work! Join Project Reciprocation! [link]
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Life is a poem,
It ebbs and flows.
Don't care if it pleases others,
And recall that it doesn't always rhyme.
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It's better to keep you mouth shut and APPEAR stupid, than it is to open it and remove all doubt. - Mark Twain
Get feedback on all of your work! Join Project Reciprocation! [link]
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Life is a poem,
It ebbs and flows.
Don't care if it pleases others,
And recall that it doesn't always rhyme.
--
It's better to keep you mouth shut and APPEAR stupid, than it is to open it and remove all doubt. - Mark Twain
Get feedback on all of your work! Join Project Reciprocation! [link]
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I'm Bill the Pony on the DA Lord of the Rings Crew! [link]
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It's better to keep you mouth shut and APPEAR stupid, than it is to open it and remove all doubt. - Mark Twain
Get feedback on all of your work! Join Project Reciprocation! [link]
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It's better to keep you mouth shut and APPEAR stupid, than it is to open it and remove all doubt. - Mark Twain
Get feedback on all of your work! Join Project Reciprocation! [link]
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I'm Bill the Pony on the DA Lord of the Rings Crew! [link]
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Life is a poem,
It ebbs and flows.
Don't care if it pleases others,
And recall that it doesn't always rhyme.
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